Writings and Witterings

Shadow Of Fear


Haunting your childhood dreams,
shadow of fear,
climbs stairs to a silent scream;
sharp talons appear
on arms extreme,
bat-like, austere.
Himself to redeem,
he edges nearer…he’s near.

Haunting your children’s dreams,
shadow of fear,
no mirror image seen,
what’s that they hear?
Horror hands intervene,
unearthly sneer;
teeth glint in foulest scene,
his silhouette leers.

Haunting your every dream
shadow of fear,
Nosferatu of nightmare theme,
stalks, then he’s here!
Touch on your shoulder seam,
fangs drip, smeared;
throat constricts slowly,
is punctured, revered.

Polly Stretton © 2012


23 thoughts on “Shadow Of Fear

  1. Just want to say this is definitely one of your best poems i have read in a while. Beautiful use of rhyme and repitition. The images are creepy and haunting, while at the same time magnificently portrayed.


    • Thanks maisygirl – some constructive advice here 🙂

      It is interesting how many people prefer end rhymes in poetry …


      • Yes, I think when something is well written using rhyme it can be brilliant. Personally I find it very hard to use rhyme in my own poems, so usually they’re freeverse.


        • It’s a strange thing, this ‘what comes naturally’ to us; a writing friend and I talked at a recent workshop, she always but always writes in rhyming verse and says her words come to her that way and all she really wants to do is to write some free verse.
          For me, I like both, I like the discipline of rhyming and the freedom of free verse – love to change a piece of prose into poetry – it’s so interesting the different ways in which people work.


  2. This is fabulous – a real gothic horror!
    What a scary poem, best read hiding behind my teddy bear ))screammmm((


  3. Glad I read this one in the morning and not at night! Thrillingly done. You’re right, it’s funny how we prefer rhymed poetry, probably because we can remember and recite it more.


    • Gosh, that’s an observation, Marina. You’re bound to be right – just think of all those nursery rhymes that we so loved as children [I confess, I still love them now]

      I do like free verse, though …


  4. Vivid, macabre images. I’d love to hear this one done as one of your audio poems.


  5. Be careful what you wish for, Carrie!!!!!


    • How you put that together so quickly is beyond me, but I loved it! Are you on Twitter? I’d like to retweet this. If not, I’ll just send out a tweet with a link to this post if that’s okay with you. Really great stuff!


      • heh-heh – so glad it’s OK 🙂

        Twitter? Oh yes! @pollyrobi 🙂 I’ve found you and am following 🙂


        • @carrie_rubin. I’ll look you up.

          By the way, yesterday when we were eating out, I checked my phone for blog comments, and while looking at one of yours, my oldest son leaned over, saw your name, and told me to ask you if you “want a cracker?” And now that I just did, he’ll probably be mortified. 🙂


  6. heh-heh … I take it that’s a parrot allusion? So original!! heh-heh! 😉


  7. yikes! too vivid! Im grateful I’ve never entertained such illustrious monsters~ye terrific!~ Sincerely Deborah


  8. This one appeals to my darky side


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