Polly

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Lamb

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Back in 2012, over at dVerse, Gay Cannon asked ‘What is modern?’ and also asked us to write a Triversen poem—I guess we all have our own take on what is modern—it seems to me to be a word that is used in many different ways…anyway, here is my Triversen poem, the form was invented by William Carlos Williams.

Now, in 2015, Grace asks us if we have a favorite spring poem to share—so here it is again 🙂

Lamb

At the start of spring sunshine
in May, a clamour occurs,
an ignominious din.

She sees the lambs born
on a cool sunny morn, stumble;
bumble, late in the daylight.

The sun rises at four,
red, ruby, gold glows up high
and christens the new-born babes.

It comes round, it goes around,
it returns on this morning
of joy, of hope, of new lives.

Polly Stretton © 2012

Over at dVerse Poets, Gay had us writing Triversen  in 2012—it’s harder than it looks—go and see for yourself! Republished in 2015 for Grace’s prompt about springtime.

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76 thoughts on “Lamb

  1. Lovely visual that brought to mind an 8-day retreat I spent at a monastery in a countryside in Pennsylvania in many years ago. The ewes were dropping their babies and every time you looked there were more little white dots on the green grass. I’m smiling.

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  2. Very effective use of the form – the implied “agnus dei” lamb of god – the Easter message of joy in resurrection, in new birth, the hope of salvation, the turn of the seasons, and cycle of life – all this is found here. It flows so naturally. The poem lies before us green, scintillating in new light.

    This is a very successful poem. Kudos.

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    • It’s a funny thing about form, whilst on the one hand it constrains on the other it frees within those constraints…if you see what I mean…

      Thank you for your comments, Gay, and for a superb prompt.

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    • Second time around I felt the naturalness of the symbolism – which goes beyond faith and redemption but right to life itself. Again, as I say a very successful poem and exquisitely beautiful.

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  3. nice…so cool to see new life born…it reminds us of the miracles that are life around us…lovely imagery in this as well..

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  4. Hiya Polly:
    ‘ignominious din”- glorious choice
    I could wax lyrical about.
    This wasn’t easy, was it?
    The lambs around us are getting big and run around in gangs at the minute.

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  5. hah! Aprille, ‘ignominious’ is a wonderful word, I’ve been wanting to use it and it came to me for this poem, I’m sure!

    No, it wasn’t easy 🙂

    Thank you for your comments.

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  6. This is one christening I wold love to see–I mean, I see it in images, and now would like to be transported there. I like the idea of the sun (she) delighting in rebirth!

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  7. Always a joy to see a naturalistic poem, as so few writers are adept at it, choosing instead an urban vocabulary.

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  8. I know little about poetry other than how it makes me feel and how the words move through my brain. Your words glide with a lovely fluidity, igniting all of my senses. For whatever that’s worth. 🙂

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  9. Love lambs in literature. Like the visual. Great work here.

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  10. Beautifully vivid write, Polly. I could see it all in glorious living color!

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  11. Simply beautiful!

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      • I’m glad you showcased this one. Have you thought of submitting it for publication somewhere?

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        • I’m fond of this one, Laurie, but fear I wouldn’t have a clue about where to submit it for publication. I’ve had some poems published in anthologies, so may wait for the next appropriate one of those … I don’t know enough about submitting work / protecting copyright / whether publishers accept blogged work etc, so now I’ve written that perhaps it will make me do something about it.

          Thank you for your interest and kind comments. Any suggestions re the above would be welcome 🙂

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  12. Lovely… Lambs bring me joy. Thank you for this piece.

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  13. Lovely imagery – new life is always so uplifting

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  14. I enjoyed this, Polly. Like your comment about the constraints/freedom of form – I think that’s true. Constrained emotion is somehow more powerful. Your poem made me look for something on triversen as it’s not a form I’m familiar with and thought you might like this link
    http://thepoetsgarret.com/2011Challenge/form12.html

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    • Hey-hey, thanks for the comments and the link, Lindsay. Triversen is an interesting form, invented by William Carlos Williams there seem to be a motley assortment of ‘rules’ eg Gay at dVerse says this: ‘Williams adapted to American poetry the syllabic prosody of the haiku and katauta by transmuting it: syllables became stresses; the seventeen syllables of the haiku and the nineteen syllables of the katauta, arranged in three lines of 5-7-5 or 5-7-7 syllables, became a “variable foot,” to use Williams’ terminology, also arranged in three lines.’ So this was the form I tried to stick with, see http://dversepoets.com/2012/06/14/formforall-triversen-an-attempt-to-define-the-modern/ it’s really interesting [if one is interested in form in poetry!]

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  15. Lovely Polly – well done. As usual I have come to the dVerse challenge too late, but am going to have a go at this form.

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    • It’s an interesting one, Sally. You did a great Triolet recently, but this is a bit different … interesting how many definitions of this form seem to abound (!)

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  16. Ahhhh…. 😉

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  17. Vivid, and with a soft emotional edge of rebirth,refreshment and the connection with renewal that the web of nature provides us–liked it much.

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  18. I just loved this, the sun christening new born lambs a delightful image… a smile on my face this Saturday morning! 🙂

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  19. Lambs and the circle of life – good theme

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  20. It’s all been said…. Apart from.

    Baaaaaa-aaaa-aaaa….

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  21. An interesting twist and a nice commentary about what constitutes the modern, we tend to be blind to those things outside our narrow conception. It’s great to see form and your conceit working together well.

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  22. I love this form and come back to it on a regular basis. Nice use of it

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  23. smiles…this is lovely…the watching of the newly born and being born is a beautiful thing…as is new life…glad you are a part of what we are doing at dverse…

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  24. Not to be disrespectful of form, rhyme, meter, etc. I pay attention to what is said and how, rather than the former. I could smell and see everything you write here. There is strong sense of renewal you put forth beautifully. Thank you.

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    • Thank you for your honesty, I like the words and the way in which they’re used, what is said and how … having said that, sometimes they can be even more effective, tightened somehow, by the constraints / freedom brought about by a particular form.

      Thank you for you thoughts, lovely to have you visit 🙂

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  25. This is wonderful. i know little of form, but this definitely brought William Carlos Williams to mind. Gorgeous imagery.

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  26. Wish the babies would wait for a warm day around here… no thunderstorms in February are their time of choice.

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  27. Spring the birth of a new year, fertile sweet smelling thinking of the pleasure of English country lanes seeing the lambs, so many thoughts as it could be birth of thought and creativity love it

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  28. Such a pretty poem. Really almost an Easter kind of poem, I thought. Though very naturalistic too, one can feel the stumbling of just-born feet.

    Thanks also for all your kindness, Polly. k.

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  29. A beautiful share Polly ~ Thanks for linking it with D’verse OLN ~

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  30. Glad it’s OK with you to bring out an oldie, Grace, thanks for the prompt 🙂

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  31. Wonderful Polly, There is nothing that is more spring to me than a newborn lamb….

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  32. spring and young animals bring joy and smiles

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  33. Joyous little critters jumping and running 😀

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  34. A wonderful poem filled with the new life of spring – serendipitously, just got a call from my husband driving to a clients home, he saw twin lambs in the field, newly born, is turning around now to stop and photograph!

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  35. Polly, I have to laugh… I saw the single word in the title and thought for a moment that the poem was going to be about Lamb, the dish… not Lamb, the animal!! And I was filled with dread, because I love those curly little guys and hate to see them end up on a plate.

    My fear diminished with the first line. (yikes…) This is a lovely poem, and I didn’t recognize any particular form, which is a strength, because usually forms are, you know, hanging out by the edges for all to see! None of that nonsense here. It would be paired (as in a wine tasting) with Viv’s ode to Spring published today. Very nicely done, Polly! (Hope you get a laugh…) Amy

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    • heh-heh–Amy you made me giggle 🙂 ‘Lamb, the dish’ indeed! ROFL 😀

      Pleased to see your fears were so quickly allayed!

      I have one thing to say to you: ‘mint sauce’! (J for joke)

      x

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  36. Yes.. the modern new of now.. is the
    same now of old.. as new is birth
    and yesterday and tomorrow
    is always death
    that cannot
    truly
    exist for now..:)

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