Polly

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Gasping at Sunbeams

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English: Lower Seafield Sunbeams through advan...

Over at dVerse Poets, Gay has us writing poetry on poetry, or ars poetica. This is my contribution. Poetry about poetry, or Ars Poetica.

Gasping at Sunbeams

Writers in attics,
finders of words,
capturing moments
that flutter as birds
away in the skies,
like bright butterflies
gasping at sunbeams,
telling no lies,
wanting the essence,
of how things might be:
form, rhythm, lyrics,
formal or free;
the significance,
the elements,
of poetry.

Polly Robinson © 2012

Peacock Butterfly © Sarah Jackson 2012

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36 thoughts on “Gasping at Sunbeams

  1. A great ‘here and now’ quality to this in the sense of ‘this is where we are, and this is how it is’. ‘Gasping at sunbeams’ really captures a sense of wonder.

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    • Thank you Andy – my immediate thoughts were to spoof it up – but others had managed that very ably for this prompt, so I had to rewrite and didn’t want anything mawkish – so ‘here and now’ fits beautifully with what I was attempting – thanks again 🙂

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  2. Very good metaphor – especially since I first misread it as ‘grasping at sunbeams’ – so it sort of encompasses both.

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  3. I like this, Polly! It’s got a light, intangible quality that captures the flash of an idea, the glimpse of the right word that you sometimes get.

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  4. LOVE THIS IMAGE!

    “Capturing moments
    That flutter as birds
    Away in the skies,”

    Those moments are often fast in their fleeing and escape capture. I’m learning to jot them down, even when incomplete.

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  5. Lovely! I agree with the others’ sentiments entirely. It’s very elegantly written. There is a word I’m thinking of to describe it – it’s driving me a bit mad, because I can’t think of it – but it’s not so dissimilar from onomatopoeia; that is to say that the poem describes beautifully what a poem is or can be 😮

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    • Thank you Sarah, so pleased that you like Gasping at Sunbeams. I wonder if you’re thinking of Ars Poetica, which was the way in which the ancient Greeks referred to poets writing about poetry? You might notice that dVerse mention it in their blog.

      Thanks again for your lovely words.

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      • Oops, I didn’t read the brief :-O Well, it’s a definite confirmation that you’ve captured what you set out to. 😮

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        • You are funny, Sarah, it’s not your job to ‘read the brief’! It’s mine! And what a great brief, or prompt, it is, those folk over at dVerse give us some wonderful ‘starters for ten’!

          I’m simply delighted when you and others come onto my blog and let me have your thoughts – it’s always good to have feedback on one’s poetry and other witterings … so thank you very, very much for taking the time and trouble to comment back to me on what I put up here. I just thought you’d like to see where I got the reference from …

          And I am pleased to see that you think I captured what I set out to do, thank you again 😀

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          • No worries chick. When I said ‘brief’ I meant the intro you wrote before the poem: ‘Over at dVerse Poets, Gay has us writing poetry on poetry, or ars poetica. This is my contribution’.

            I think ‘we’ are funny as a combination, lol. We seem to miscommunicate beautifully rofl 🙂

            Worry not – Sending you big hugs (((Polly))) 🙂

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  6. capturing the essence of how things might be….yep i like that…and that bit of magic does tend to flutter around and we have to be quick to catch it…smiles…

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  7. Simply beautiful, Polly!

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  8. This is wonderful. I so enjoyed it 🙂 Like catching the words with a butterfly net 🙂

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  9. I find the little monsters, especially melodies, visit when there’s no way I can catch them: in the shower, while driving, in dreams :). Nicely done!

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  10. Our thoughts do have a tendency to be fleeing, there one minute, gone the next so we do need to get them written down as we think of them or they’re lost forever. This is poetry at its best. Love the title too!

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    • Wouldn’t it be great to be able to do a ‘braindump’?

      Thank you for your thoughts – I must admit I’m partial to the title myself! [is that very bad?] heh-heh 🙂

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  11. Straight to the heart – what a beautiful poem, full of passion and common sense!
    🙂

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  12. I like the way you opened:

    “Writers in attics,
    Finders of words,”

    Enjoyed the rhyme as well.

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  13. lively rhythm through the rhyme =)

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  14. I thought this was “just” perfect! It made me entirely happy. What could be better?!

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  15. Lovely!!! “Capturing moments” … love this !

    PS I stopped on side of interstate to take a photo of sunbeams on my way back home last eve. Will post soon 😉

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    • Welcome stranger! Great to see you here, I know, Ann, you said you’d be away a while … You’ve been missed.

      So pleased you like this poem and thanks for the comments – I’ll bet your sunbeam pic will be a totally different vista from the one above in the UK … can’t wait to see it 🙂

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