Polly

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Daughter of the Sewer Rat

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Brighton Sewer Tour

This poem is in response to K. McGee‘s blog about Ae Freslighe, a highly structured Irish poem format. It remains a challenge and I’ll continue to mull it over … fascinating form …

Daughter of the Sewer Rat

Daughter urchin snivelling
In alleys dark and smelly
Whining voice a’grizzling
With no food in her belly

Beneath the road, thundering
Slow sewers, deep, dank, darkly
Reach the child a’blundering
She stares at bleak walls starkly

Nightmare journey, quivering
Trembling in waste water
Cold with fright a’shivering
Sewer rat’s own daughter

Polly Robinson © 2012

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16 thoughts on “Daughter of the Sewer Rat

  1. Great photo and I like the description. Thank you.

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  2. This is dark, somewhat macabre, even. If she is human it is scary. I know in some cities people do live in the sewers and, isn’t that a sad thought. I don’t know anything about the Irish form but, do think this is a great poem.

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  3. I can’t get over how well you’ve tackled this form. Love the sprinkled alliteration and your word choices are a tongues delight. Very emotive: Foreboding. I signed up for an email alert on top of my feed subscription, this way I can catch all your poems without you getting lost in my extensive poetry feed. 🙂

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  4. I’m not sure how I missed this one. I usually gravitate to the dark ones. 😉

    I’ll leave the format to you. I’ll just enjoy your words as always. 🙂

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    • Thanks Carrie, I’m having some fun with different forms just now and comment on them in case some of my poet friends will find it interesting too.

      You seem to appreciate the darker ones and anything with a hint of medicine / science 🙂

      I’m pleased you didn’t miss this one.

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  5. def a dark shadow on this one but really nicely weaved in form…def great job on word choices as well to set the tone….

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  6. An Irish challenge! Good as a tryout. It’s always a challenge when lots of rhyming is involved. Great write Polly!

    Hank

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  7. Oooh, I do like this one… I want to write about rats after seeing one of those “hoarder” programmes… You don’t want to know, really, I promise! 😉

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