Polly

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Dawn

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Dawn

Dawn (Photo credit: TEVR)

Samuel Peralta challenged us to write a Pantoum this week at dVerse ~ and after much deliberation I believe I’ve done it ~ similar to the Villanelle, in that there are repeating lines throughout the poem, it is composed of a series of quatrains; the second and fourth lines of each stanza are repeated as the first and third lines of the next. This pattern continues until the final stanza, which differs in the repeating pattern.

Dawn

You can’t deny the dawning of day,
Wherever, whatever, however you play,
Meeting a man who is here yet away,
Never remembered, never met before.

Wherever, whatever, however you play,
The cows in the byre, the sheep in the hay,
Never remembered, never met before,
A moment to savour, relish, adore.

The cows in the byre, the sheep in the hay,
The cockerel is crowing to welcome the day,
A moment to savour, relish, adore,
This time of the morning knocks on the door.

The cockerel is crowing to welcome the day,
Meeting a man who is here yet away,
This time of the morning knocks on the door,
You can’t deny the dawning of day.

Polly Robinson © 2012

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19 thoughts on “Dawn

  1. Love it, Polly. One teeny typo in second to last line. Really like “This time of the morning knocks on the door”

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  2. And time moves on regardless… I’ve been contemplating this one too. It’s an interesting form. Well done.

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  3. i like the metaphor here..the dawning of day, the meeting of the man who’s here yet away… the start of something new, the familiar which seems unfamiliar, the longing… nicely played on the form as well polly

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  4. Pretty. The subtle sweet emotions of hope and yearning are lovely. ~ Lily

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  5. smiles…i like…love all the animal sounds you incorporated, bringing that dawn to life….very nicely done on form polly…you did very well with it…

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    • Those sneaky animals came in of their own accord … I didn’t invite them, but all of a sudden a veritable farmyard appeared! Glad you liked them Brian and thank you for your thoughts 🙂

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  6. You’ve combined a lot in this poem… a light romanticism, a naturalistic flavor… and the structure of the pantoum isn’t overbearing, it weighs in ever-so-subtly in the background, like a pattern in the flow. Good job.

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  7. Nicely done. Not many contributors managed to stick to the constraints. You made it look easy.

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  8. The sun comes out like clockwork whether we can see it or not…

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