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Mañana Seaside Days

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Sally J. Blackmore asked the poets at her workshop to write an Anaphoric and Ekphrastic poem.  This picture, by British contemporary impressionist, Leslie Stones, transported me to a childhood holiday with the family.  Amazingly ~ do coincidences really happen? ~ Karin opened the dVerse pub doors and asked us to write about summer!

Searching the Rock Pools Leslie Stones [www.lesliestones.co.uk]

Mañana Seaside Days

Seaside siblings and a crèche of cousins,
Deckchair damsels dashing hopes of dozens,
Countless crabby tickled toes a’paddling,
Rock pools ~ splash! ~ soft sands in sunlight dazzling,
Scabby shins sprawl sandily, stickily,
Toes touch, tease towel tents, torment trickily,
Lulling listening, laughs linger lacily,
Sunshine shimmers on sunhats racily,
Gulls’ wings sigh while seashells gleam and glitter,
Seaside sunny days hot, sparkling sitters,
Slosh, slosh shallows; shush shushing shingle hosts
Mañana seaside days at Cornish coast.

Polly Stretton © 2012

… and here is an audio of the original poem, especially for Claudia and Amy …

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49 thoughts on “Mañana Seaside Days

  1. Totally transported and sense-rich;
    I can feel the sand and taste the saltspray.

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  2. Almost a bit of a tongue twister with all of those S words. Lovely. I’ve always liked artwork depicting children on beaches. You captured the scene so well.

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    • Leslie Stones, the creator of this fab pic, kindly agreed that I could use it. I’m sure he’ll be delighted to see your comments Carrie.

      Many thanks for your thoughts.

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  3. Hello Polly,
    I’m happy for you to use my artwork, and very happy with the poem you have written, it really captures the feeling of a family day out at the English seaside. Wonderful!

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  4. Wow, you have really portrayed those seaside days vividly here. I love the SOUND of this poem very much.

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  5. oh i just love how you use the words polly, this has such a playful and carefree character.. the form works well as well..i’d love to hear that read…think that would double the fun….very cool

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  6. nice…this was so much fun…love the rhyme scheme as it played so well with the days at the beach…you def captured the sights and color of the beach and those fun days…smiles…

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    • Summer is just the most wonderful time ~ though in truth we haven’t had much of a one this year ~ nevertheless, the days that were fine and sunny were just as captured here.

      Thanks for your thoughts Brian.

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  7. Ah, so pretty and tinkling. And shushing. Great music and images here. k.

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    • Thanks k. What a fab prompt. Bet you get lots more contributions from the dVerse poets. Just wonderful.

      Glad you liked Mañana Seaside Days 🙂

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  8. You had me at ‘creche of cousins’! Then I was skipping along with you- just love this! Kathleen

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  9. Gosh – someone’s been rather busy with all these new posts! 🙂
    And I see here you’ve been feeling alliterative…

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  10. Just a teeny, tiny, tadpole tidbit … 😉

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  11. Really love this… I wrote about the beach, too (like yours better, though)!

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  12. This is a lovely write Polly. Reminds me of Brighton Beach, which I’ve tip toed across in bare feet so many times on all the shingle and pebbles there. You poem is so delightful, fun and so well describes everything kids do at the beach. The pic is fabulous and so apt to go with your words.

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    • No mistaking a Brit beach in summertime ~ glad this reminded you of happy times Bren 🙂

      Wasn’t I lucky to find such a fab image? 😀

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  13. I didn’t get to make it to the beach this summer… your poem makes me wish I would have tried harder!

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  14. Mañana mañana – Cornwall- I love Cornwall- especially Mevagissey – your poem captures everything about the place- in all it’s sparkly shimmering summeriness! I want to go…in fact … I might just go and get in my car right now….really nice form as well….very well excecuted

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  15. Wow, what a delicious snack for my mouth. My tongue is quite happy having read this aloud. 🙂

    This is my favorite line: “Toes touch, tease towel tents, torment trickily”

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  16. This is lovely, Polly. I love the “hot sunny seaside days”, and all of the sparkle and glitter, and especially the laughter. What a dreamy piece. 🙂

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    • I love hot sunny seaside days too, there have not been so many of them in UK this year but some … just as a reminder for us perhaps lest we forget 🙂

      Beaches always make me think of laughter ~ kids giggling especially ~ and of course the glittering shimmering sands ~ darn it, I want to be there now! 😉

      Thanks for visiting and your comments, Archna.

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  17. oh wow!! love all the sandy glitter…and the sunny waves. love the rhyming. now i want to visit the sea 🙂

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    • Gosh, I’ve just written ‘I want to be there now’ … it’s the thought of that shimmering sand just waiting for us Mohana!

      Lovely to see your thoughts ~ thanks for visiting 🙂

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  18. Polly, this took me back to our days in Puerto Rico, Riley running naked as a jaybird on this sand (she was a toddler, and all the little ones do it there). Your alliteration and internal rhymes made this roll off my tongue. I read it aloud twice. I hope you will consider reading your poetry for http://www.virtualpoetryreading.com, Buddah Moskowitz’s project. You can even “phone it in,” literally!

    Now nice that you were able to combine the two prompts. This poem positively glowed with summer. Peace, Amy
    http://sharplittlepencil.com/2012/08/19/sunburn-for-dverse/

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    • Amy, so pleased to see your comments ~ always good to be reminded of special times 🙂

      Thanks for the link, a new one to me, I shall go and see what’s what with it in a mo!

      Many thanks for your thoughts re alliteration / internal rhyme ~ was a tad concerned at one stage that there might be too much alliteration and thus the poem might be rendered less credible but some good comments so trust OK 🙂 x

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  19. Nice play with image and words using rhyme and alliteration

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  20. Love the audio! You read beautifully, and the sound of the water/sea at the end has given me an insane craving for the beach (insane because there is no way I can get there in the foreseeable future). Lovely language; I think the alliteration & rhyme work very well. It’s a playful poem about a playful time. Thank you.

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    • Thank you ds, how very kind of you. Glad you enjoyed Mañana Seaside Days ~ it was wonderful to write, if time-consuming (!)
      Shame you can’t get down to the beach for a while ~ but you can always listen again 😀
      Lovely to see you visiting ~ do come back sometime.

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  21. This is lovely Polly – I liked the audio visual too…

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    • Thanks Wendy ~ I’m always a bit iffy about audio / visuals but had been asked by two blogging friends to do one, so …

      Many thanks for your comments ~ truly appreciated 🙂

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