Polly

Writings and Witterings

Dimension

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A cause for consternation
across the conurbation, ripe
with foul frustration
and no small apprehension
our tutor’s decision
to give our destination
an historical dimension
and a path to scansion and to rhyme.

He grips our attention,
oh, vision, what description!
Torrid definition.
A brief elimination,
much eradication,
elation, condemnation,
What a combination, of like
Poets in a room Cadbury’s Fruit & Nut!

Polly Stretton © 2012

Written at Arvon during an exercise where we had to make a list of words with the either the same or a similar ending. Final two lines just changed out of mischief (!) heh-heh… 😀

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14 thoughts on “Dimension

  1. That was very good. I imagine it is to be spoken quickly, to a fast beat.

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    • Hi Joe, sorry for delay in response. Like Holly says, it’s written to be performed, and I tend to agree that a fairly fast beat would be good—the words lend themselves to it, perhaps?

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  2. Loved the rhythm of this, but I must confess, when I read the first line, I thought it said “A cause for constipation.” And then I thought, “Well, that doesn’t seem quite right,” so I had to reread it. Ahh, now it makes sense. Guess it shows my mind is never far from the medical. 🙂

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  3. Aha! This brings back memories…. Naughty Polly being not a little subversive in class…! The rhythm is indeed excellent and as Joe says it’s definitely a spoken word piece. I think the pace can vary for emphasis, but maybe that’s cos I’ve heard you read it before. Lots of fun.

    Also, I like Carrie’s “constipation” comment – I think that could be the start of a whole other poem…. 😉

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  4. ‘eh, what? Polly, subversive? Never! 😀

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  5. Fun and just a little tongue-in-cheek!

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  6. jolly fun! fantastic as a read-aloud.

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  7. Love the beat to this – gives a street feel! Loving the alternate ending too!!

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