Writings and Witterings

Triolet: For the Birds


It’s Napowrimo, it’s Day 25, and a triolet for the birds on the seed feeder was born.

Finches cling to full seed feeder,
grounded thrush pecks yellow mealworms,
pigeons play, ‘follow my leader,’
finches cling to full seed feeder,
as earth, the garden weeder, turns,
throwing worms to redbreast cheepers,
feels warmth in soil and from it learns.
Finches cling to full seed feeder,
grounded thrush pecks yellow mealworms.

Polly Stretton © 2013

Birds Fight at the Seed Feeder

Birds Fight at the Seed Feeder (Photo credit: dagnyg)

A triolet is an eight-line poem. All the lines are in iambic tetramenter (for a total of eight syllables per line), and the first, fourth, and seventh lines are identical, as are the second and final lines. This means that the poem begins and ends with the same couplet. Beyond this, there is a tight rhyme scheme (helped along by the repetition of lines) — ABaAabAB.


25 thoughts on “Triolet: For the Birds

  1. A new style. Let me think about it! Nice image as well!


  2. Excellent triolet Polly. I like the assonance. Nicely done 🙂


  3. Oh, lovely! I am going to have to do one of these today–my favorite form!


  4. you really capture a rhythm fitting a finch. wonderful triolet.


  5. Since I’m the poetry ignoramus, it won’t surprise you that I first read the title as: Toilet: For the Birds. Oh, Polly, I can’t believe you haven’t blocked me from your site yet.

    But the poem was lovely! I actually read it out loud. I liked the tongue-twisting effect of the words. And by admitting that, I probably further sealed my ignoramus state…


  6. ah that sounds like lots of fun…love the allits and the lightweight mood of this


  7. It was so much fun reading this. 😀


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  9. Loving the redbreast cheepers 🙂


  10. Lovely triolet…I can just picture all the birds conversing over dinner! 🙂


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