Polly

Writings and Witterings

Aercet

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Pre-formed walls,
clutched in orange crane
maws,
waltzing
‘The Blue Danube,’
a ballet she
danced as a child.

The architect cries
when she sees
above the trees, houses
and hills.
She weeps.

Local miners,
golden clay,
~ 18,000 tons ~
each year,
a face,
a veneer.

‘The Blue Danube’ plays.
Strauss hums
as the house
sighs,
satisfied, complete.

Polly Robinson © 2013

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19 thoughts on “Aercet

  1. Polly enjoyed reading your poem
    A dream complete
    Some people never see it
    But some of us like me and you do
    It gives a feel good feeling
    And your heart and soul a lift
    Making life worth living
    And complete
    Have a beautiful tomorrow
    ╔╗
    ║║╔═╦╦╦═╗*. . *
    ║╚╣║║║║╩╣* Daniel angel from Cape Cornwall•*´¨`*•
    ╚═╩═╩═╩═╝.*.*

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  2. Ah, I used to play ‘The Blue Danube’ on the piano. I can hear and feel that waltzing melody now.

    I had to stop in for a Polly Poetry Fix before my official break begins. Glad I did. Very nice. 🙂

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  3. Great bit of storytelling Polly,

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  4. some melodies just take us home… and i too like the storytelling in this polly

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  5. I love the Blue Danube! I was a little sad to find they didn’t play it when docking space craft to the space station.

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  6. VERY nice, pal, I particularly liked the rhyming of ‘year’ with ‘veneer’. Just saw the notes from WWC and congrats on having both your Flash fiction and mega poem so well recieved (I shall have to comission a signed version of your Lychgate piece, perhaps printed on parchment, to be framed). Keep smiling and keep writing 🙂

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  7. Intriguing – love it!

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  8. Lovely and complete 😀

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  9. Polly, this is amazing stuff. The Blue Danube holds memories for me, too, the first time I heard a full orchestra they played it.

    Loved your use of the word “maws,” which is not one of the most graceful in the dictionary, yet you made them mechanical, rather than the usual “maws of the Beast,” or whatever. Thoroughly original and beautifully told. Amy

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    • Ooops! Caught me out nicely, Amy! I hadn’t realised that I’ve used the word ‘maws’ twice within a week *ashamed* … but it does fit (in both cases!)

      The Blue Danube is an amazing work ~ I’ve seen it danced as a ballet in so many different styles, and also as an orchestral piece in Venice (at La Fenice, wondrous) ~ beautiful …

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