Writings and Witterings



English: Birds on a wire The road is the B8009...

A line of asterisks sitting on wire,
hop foot to foot as if they are on fire.
Open yellow beaks shout and rage, reveal fear,
small boys with slings fling fast and furious jeers.

The birds step solemn: step – step – step – side – side,
vandals chuck, would pluck, and are struck to deride;
feathers moult, birds bolt, jet eyes throw jaded sparks.
Depths of pure evil will not be surpassed.

Polly Stretton Β© 2013


26 thoughts on “Asterisks

  1. Really well done Polly! πŸ˜‰


  2. It seems that birds are in the air, Polly. I just wrote one about gulls at Brighton Pier. I love you piece. Well done. Great hoppy rhythm to it.


  3. That first line is so very intriguing…


  4. I love the first line too…………..


  5. THe “depths of evil” lie on both sides. Those damned carrions, ready to peck out your eyes (yiles! The Birds!), but that’s their nature. I love black birds, actually, even the carrions. They look striking atop a fence post or on the wire.

    The real evil is the little brats who try to slingshot them off their perches. Little bastards! I don’t hold with the “boys will be boys” line… no excuse for that action, but that’s just me…

    Beautifully realized poem, Polly, and the title fits the pic perfectly. They DO look like asterisks! Amy


    • Ha! Sooooo good to see you back, Amster … you always totally get it ~ the evil does lie on both sides ~ and actually, I don’t think it’s ‘just you’.

      They look like asterisks to me too πŸ˜€


  6. Wow Polly! I will never look at those wires in the same way again.


  7. Love this! Perfect opening line πŸ™‚


  8. I can imagine this as an opening to a story… Great first line!


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