Polly

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Grave

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This flash fiction is for Friday Fictioneers. Rochelle Wisoff-Fields asks us to use a photo as a prompt and write a one hundred word story with a beginning, middle and end. If you fancy taking part in Friday Fictioneers, click here.

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The sun has driven me from the car. I sit by an upturned gravestone, under a tree, to read your letter again.

The postman, Joe, had knocked me up in the cool of early morning. Asked if the car air-con was fixed.

‘Nah.’

Joe handed me your letter. You’d typed the envelope. You always do that. I turned the envelope over. No tiny dotted outline of a heart to seal the envelope. You always used to do that.

‘C’mon man, you look like you seen a ghost!’ Joe looked at me, frowning. ‘Could be good news.’

Cool here.

She’s gone.

[100 words]

Polly Stretton © 2013

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26 thoughts on “Grave

  1. Quite nice, enjoyed!

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  2. What fun! It jiggled the old grey matter. 🙂

    Perhaps I shall have to give it a try…

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  3. Nicely done. I liked the transfer from ‘always do’ to ‘always used to do’. Said it all.

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  4. Dear Polly,

    He picked quite a place to read such a letter. Nice one.

    shalom,

    Rochelle

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  5. Good story I liked well done.

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  6. I did get a laugh out of “knocked me up”, which here in the State means getting someone pregnant (even though I knew what you meant.)

    janet

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  7. Dear Polly,

    Loved this slice of life in the cool of the graveyard. She’s gone. Nice touch with few words.

    Aloha,

    Doug

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  8. ah you did well with telling a story in just 100 words…not easy at all

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  10. ‘She’s gone’. I like that ending. I may very well be stupid, but I can’t decide what it means. A death of some kind. Good setting for the end of something. I will stay stupid if it is this entertaining! Ann

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    • heh-heh … well, I guess you could take it in at least two ways … either that ‘she’ is the writer and has finished a relationship with him, or that ‘she’ is dead. When I wrote it, it was the first that I’d intended. Pretty tricky, this writing a story in a hundred words …

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      • Yes, 100 word fiction is not easy. The discipline has really helped me, though. As a direct result, I wrote the first draft of a regular length short story the other week in under 8 hours. That’s a first for me.

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        • Hmmm, I’ve done a few 300 word flash fiction pieces, but this was a first for me. You’re right, for sure, the discipline will help 🙂

          Well done for doing a short story in such a small space of time ~ impressed.

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  11. A great story here Polly… you managed to fill a lot of tragedy an loss. Loved the detail with the heart

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