Polly

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Upright, shoulders back,
sitting on a kitchen chair.
Steam rises
from a white fine china cup.
Light motes
filter in the air.
He stares
at a drop of hot brown tea
cooling as it dribbles
from where his lips
touched;
it trickles stuttering down the side,
makes its way to the saucer
where a silver, tea streaked spoon
rests.
The spoon carried one
and a half spoons
of sugar to the cup,
as his hand shook
grains of sugar fell
to the table
and remained there;
round, white, slightly shimmering
on the green polka dot cloth.

Polly Stretton © 2015

Suggestions for a title would be welcome 🙂

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31 thoughts on “Untitled

  1. Hi, Polly,

    How about Shaken but not Stirred!?

    Cheers,

    Peter.

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  2. Hmmm…very interesting (use appropriate accent for this!) Thanks Peter. I shall make a list 🙂

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  3. “A Sweet Moment”

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  4. a very poignant and almost sad poem, but lovely and evocative…why not keep it as Untitled?

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    • Thanks Pixie…yes, that kind of gets to where I was coming from, it’s an imagined brief sweet moment in time…maybe after something…well, not catastrophic, that would be too harsh a word, but maybe after some sort of drama (not to say crisis!) – thanks again.

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  5. Hey Polly–a beautiful poem. The title that jumped to mind for me was Bittersweet. Or maybe simply Tea. k.

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  6. I think I prefer Tea to Bittersweet, but I’m sure you can come up with something! k.

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  7. Still life?

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  8. This is lovely, Polly. It conjures solitude and a bit of melancholy in one’s older years. Not sure if I interpreted it correctly, but that’s what I think of.

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  9. Thanks Carrie, yes, I think you’ve got a decent handle on the interpretation…and it does have a melancholy air…looks like you had a splendid time in London on the Eye 🙂

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  10. Wonderfully visual Polly and I would leave it as ‘untitled’ I think. There just isn’t a name for some things and this feels to me all the more powerful for having no guidelines for the reader x

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    • Thank you – an interesting point – I’ve had some fine ideas from folk but I’m still undecided. It’s one of those that may not be resolved and that could be its own solution 🙂

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  11. Brilliant, love it. How about Tease or Silver Spoon 🙂

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  12. This is lovely Polly, very thought provoking and has a touch of sadness for me anyway, How about Contemplation for a title?

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  13. Polly! Thanks for visiting! Hey, how about Tea Ceremony? There is so much determination that goes into his attempting to drink it… This was a moment or series of movements caught in amber, very nice indeed. Thanks, Amy

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  14. Beautiful Polly! You have given it such depth. It brought to mind, for me, The Red Wheelbarrow by William Carlos Williams.

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  15. My only thought for a title, Requiem.

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  16. Hey Polly, hope all well. k.

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