Polly

Writings and Witterings

Summer Sun – a triolet

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Back in April 2012, following Catherine Crosswell’s first trioletPass the Parcel” I had been meaning to have a bash at one.  An especially hot day during the summer of 2012 seemed the perfect day to write it. It was so hot, too hot to actually do gardening [much as it needed dealing with!] – well, that was my excuse, as if I need one!

So here it is, offered to Grace for dVerse Poets for OpenLinkNight#153

Summer Sun

The summer sun beats down, merciless,
And the birds are exhausted with heat,
Sparrows dust bath, pigeons purr.
The summer sun beats down, merciless,
Up with sunshades, lounge, don’t stir,
A sun lotion Sunday paper treat.
The summer sun beats down, merciless,
And the birds are exhausted with heat.

Polly Stretton © 2012

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48 thoughts on “Summer Sun – a triolet

  1. That was an excellent post today. Thanks for sharing. I really enjoyed it very much.

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  2. This is fabulous – sparrows are so cute 🙂

    I have nominated you for the Beautiful Blogger Award
    http://worldlywinds.com/2012/05/27/beautiful-blogger-award/

    Keep the poetry alive 🙂

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    1. So good that you liked the triolet, Alex and WOW! Thank you so much for the award. How kind 🙂

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  3. ‘The summer sun beats down, merciless,’ Love this line and the fact the sun is beating down on the reader relentlessly throughout your Triolet. You can really feel it. Phew!! Lollies and bird baths all round 🙂

    Thanks for the share. I better try and write another 🙂

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  4. Captures the feeling of heat really well, Polly.

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  5. Great Job Polly! Triolets are HARD work…but quite rewarding…in the end! 😀

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  6. Hmm … perhaps it’s the discipline that makes them tricky [she muses].
    Thanks for your thoughts, Jamy, good to see you here 🙂

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  7. Nicely done Polly… With Best Wishes Scott http://www.scotthastie.com

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  8. Thank you for commenting Scott.

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  9. Oh – that sun, but what a great excuse to write a triolet.. Love those little poems.

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  10. Captured perfectly. I think you’ve had some summer days like that this year. Luckily, we’ve escaped most of the really toasty heat.

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  11. Well done. The birds are exhausted, I’m exhausted – the Japanese have a word for it – natsubate – check out the d’Verse Poetics for dog days. After reading this, I think you will definitely relate. I am ready for snow!

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    • heh-heh…we’re all exhausted 😉
      When I checked out your dVerse Poetics for dog days I could truly see how you related to my poem. I am sorry I couldn’t be part of that dVerse post, but of course, I’d probably have reached for the same poem you see above!

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      • I’m sure many of us will post on open link night what we can’t always get done in time to post for prompt. I hope you’ll be joining us on a regular basis. We are great fans of the triolet form. I for one don’t do them well,but I do admire those who can.

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  12. You have captured the exhaustion of those hot, hot, hot summer days!

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  13. This is pure delight, Polly. Quail love to take their dirt baths in our raised veggie garden and I love watching them. It hasn’t been that stiffling here this week so I’m not feeling that exhaustion…but it’s easy enough to recall.

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  14. cool, I could feel the summer heat and its play on the animals which I never think about

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  15. If the birds and other animals are exhausted from heat, so am I ~ I feel the refraining lines ~

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  16. You made me feel the heat exhaustion — and I am officially still in winter here!

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  17. Hi Polly…I enjoyed your triolet very much as it describes the scorching heat that we’ve been having here this summer. Truly it is stifling outside…no fun to be out there at all. I think the birds and animals must seek shade during the worst of it…poor things.

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    • Hi Gayle, glad you enjoyed my triolet–you would have scorching heat, and quite frequently, where you now live. I always feel sorry for the small critters too, hope there’s plenty of shade for them and that they can find water.

      Talking of small critters (!) how is your little granddaughter? Hope all is well x

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      • That little critter of a granddaughter will be turning three in about a month! Can you believe it’s been that long already? She’s a darling, sweet girl and I’m still helping take care of her every week. All is well…thanks for asking and I hope things are well with you too, Polly. At least you’re still writing…I can’t seem to get it together… xoxo

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        • OMG! That’s incredible! So glad all is well. I’m still waiting to move house but hopeful this will happen by the end of the year. Happy writing Gayle 🙂

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  18. Heat exhaustion indeed! The sun lotion Sunday paper treat sounds like something my clumsy self would (entangle myself in the paper and let it all stick to my sun lotion) – a lovely succinct description of a whole scene in just one line.

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  19. Simple yet adorable images – you paint to beautifully with your words, Loved it.

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  20. Excellent triolet 🙂

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  21. A sterling triolet, & clever take of heat, dog days, exhaustion, & dust bathes, Isn’t it interesting that so mAny critters, from elephants to sparrows take dust bathes to beat the swelter? I have considered my self a couple of times.

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    • Ha! I like that my triolet is ‘sterling’, what a great word – and you’re right, it is interesting that so many critters take dust baths – don’t think I’d recommend it for you, though 😉

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  22. Ah.. the dinosaurs come first..
    birds evolve from them..
    then humans evolve
    NOW
    to give
    Birds
    Bath..:)

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  23. That’s very hot if even the birds are exhausted — wonder if they can even sing?

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