This poem was short listed for the Paragram Poetry Prize in 2013. I was invited to Covent Garden to read both this and the long listed ‘Hobgoblin Trees.’ Tonight I’m posting it for dVerse, where we have Kelly behind the bar. Kelly’s asked us about scents that linger, ‘Latent’ fits the criteria.
Latent
Grey, receding,
the fragrance of his shaving gel.
He carries an iPad.
The first thing to leave
is the light of his eyes.
I touch his absence;
a disembodied voice, ‘see you later.’
There are magical contortions
made by dust motes,
they swirl in the sunbeams that
pour through the east window,
and echo, ‘later, later.’
I still feel the tweed jacket,
rough against my fingers,
it lingers with his shadow in the room.
Polly Stretton © 2016
06/01/2016 at 00:13
This touched me very much ~ I specially admire this part:
The first thing to leave
is the light of his eyes.
I touch his absence;
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06/01/2016 at 00:21
Excellent poem, the closing stanza is killer-good. You get a lot of mileage out of brevity; nice job.
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06/01/2016 at 00:52
Sigh.. I can feel the emotions here.. beautiful write 🙂
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06/01/2016 at 00:53
Yes, excellent! The scent does linger…no doubt at all.
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06/01/2016 at 01:08
tender, touching, lovely
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06/01/2016 at 01:19
Super write. The first two lines and the last stanza – together an incredible poem in themselves.
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06/01/2016 at 01:48
Wonderfully written… And filled with heart. I can feel the love and the loss.
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06/01/2016 at 04:35
“The first thing to leave is the light of his eyes”…that line really grabbed me, and that disembodied voice…later. Powerful, Polly, tender and touching.
I believe you were moving last time we communicated (it’s been a while), and I see you have a new name too. Wishing you well, Polly, and a Happy New Year! xo
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06/01/2016 at 06:29
Powerful emotions Polly! Félicitations!
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06/01/2016 at 06:59
Short but so potent, each word carefully weighed.
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06/01/2016 at 07:29
The scent, the touch of his tweed, but most of all the gradual absence… Receding.. too many relationships are just that. Wonderfully written.
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06/01/2016 at 12:25
This is just lovely, Polly–it is very well-worked and wrought, and the feeling of absence is beautifully limned. Thanks. k.
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06/01/2016 at 19:05
Poignant.
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06/01/2016 at 21:02
When smeLL
of gel.. iS greater
than spoken
heArt
muSic
human
fAils
bEinG..:)
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07/01/2016 at 04:17
You tell a touching tale of losing a loved one.
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08/01/2016 at 21:12
I admire your poem. It evoked memories of something that I wrote called “Mom’s Itchy Skin”. Would you be willing to critique it please? If so, ….https://verbalstrings.wordpress.com/2015/08/19/moms-itchy-skin-inspired-by-ablution-by-amy-fleury/
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08/01/2016 at 21:15
Sweet poem some of the wonderful things that remain after a huge loss.
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23/02/2016 at 12:38
Beautifully written Polly, I can feel the emotion in your words…touch his absence…what a line!
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23/02/2016 at 15:09
Thanks Di, good to see you liked ‘Latent’ 😄
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