Polly

Writings and Witterings

Lamb

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My favourite springtime poem, published in Girl’s Got Rhythm: Lamb

At the start of spring sunshine
in May, a clamour occurs,
an ignominious din.

She sees the lambs born
on a cool summer morn, stumble;
bumble, late in the daylight.

The sun rises at four,
red, ruby-gold glows up high
and christens the new-born babes.

It comes round, it goes around
it returns on this morning
of joy, of hope, of new lives.

Polly Stretton © 2012

For those interested in form in poetry, this is a Triversen which is described as:

The rhythm of normal speech, employing 1 to 4 strong stresses per line.

Stanzaic  Written in any number of tercets. Each tercet is one sentence, a kind of natural breath.

Grammatical  There should be 3 lines. L1 is a statement of fact or observation, L2 and L3 should set the tone, imply a condition or associated idea, or carry a metaphor for the original statement.

Alliteration contributes to stress.

Other ‘rules’ found on the internet:

Triversen:

Each stanza equals one sentence.

Each sentence/stanza breaks into 3 lines (each line is a separate phrase in the sentence).

There is a variable foot of 2-4 beats per line.

The poem as a whole should add up to 18 lines (or 6 stanzas). As you’ll see, I did not heed this rule, the poem seemed complete to me after just 4 stanzas 🙂

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3 thoughts on “Lamb

  1. Polly, I love it as much as I did the first time I read it in my copy of your lovely book. By the way, it is the perfect read for the bedside or a lovely gift… xx

    Struggling to stay online here as many throughout our department are having issues with our internet service. Fingers crossed.

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    • Good to hear from you Léa, extraordinary to think we’ve been exchanging words for 7 years! Hope your internet issues are quickly resolved 🙂

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      • Time flies when there is good poetry to read… Yes, it has flown by. The internet issues are so frustrating, it isn’t just about my blogs but I can’t read the ones I enjoy so much. 🙂

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